The Last Stand - ID# 473
Batavia
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
In a distant land, a general rallies the troops to fight against magical entities and what looks like sure defeat.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/30 7:45 pm - Really nice to see an animated film! Nice work on the animation and sound design. Sound is always important in film, but with animation you have to build everything from the ground up. Nice job immersing us in the world. I guess I would have liked to see the whole piece. This feels like it is part of a series and the “to be continued” leaves me feeling the story is incomplete. I want to see more. Great job on this!
- 4/30 12:54 pm - The colors and textures of this animation are quite beautiful. The voice of the lion came across very strong. I would've liked to see the other characters have voices. It could help with enhancing and identifying the power dynamic between them all. The sound mixing feels so part of the world of this film. Great attention to detail. I would push more into it. What other sounds might exist that we normally wouldn't consider? The drums are so fitting with the theme of the jungle. What other sounds can allude to the jungle or animalistic feel? Some of the animals have an anthropological portrayal. I think this film does more of this hinting of man v.s animal. I would've loved to see more of this. Maybe we could see the animals doing more "human" things? War and battle is already such a human thing that I think having animals inherit this is super clever. Great job!
- 4/29 11:18 am - Strengths: Great animations! You are very skilled. The audio suited the visuals very well; vocal effect for the lion was impactful, as were the SFX. Clear story, though I would''ve loved for it to be twice as long. Improvements: Opening shot could've been held for a beat or two longer (I was enjoying trying to look at all the different characters but it got cut a little short). I wish I could see more!
Judge 1
Positives: I thought this was a great animated film. I liked the cuts with the bird flying and how it kept getting closer.
Improvements: I think the audio could have been recorded with a better recorder, it would have made it sound crisper. There were some frames that could have been executed better.
Judge 2
Positives: This feels like a tease to something much bigger! Super great job doing an entirely animated short, I assume, by yourself. Very impressive work. I also think your excellent choice of shots and sense of scale was very useful in getting across the madness that is war. Good job!
Improvements: Your sound wasn't recorded the greatest-- in animation, getting a great voice cast as well as clean audio can make or break a project. Next time, take extra care in that department. Also, it took me a couple watches to understand what the first scene in the bar was meant to tell. I'm not sure if it's 100% needed, or perhaps there's a way to show the before and after of these character's lives in a better, more meaningful and impactful way. It took me a second to register the connection between the tavern scene and how we got to the battlefield.
Judge 3
Positives: Super creative, I really love the animation. I think the fight scene felt epic and I’m a sucker for the fast line fast movement so props for that. Also loved all your settings. I felt like everything was consistent overall and I really got to dive deep into the world that you’re created.
Improvements: I felt the story was a bit short, I know there was probably not enough time to do everything that you were hoping to do, but I think you could have maybe reevaluated what you wanted to do to do something that you can accomplish within the time constraint because I felt like I was watching a piece, not a hole. Also, I think it would’ve been nice to get different voice actors for different characters because everyone felt the same. And lastly, I didn’t really feel the stakes I wasn’t sure what we were fighting for or what the motivation for this fight was so clarification on that would be nice.
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