2/28 12:13 pm - -Don't give sources the microphone. YOU are the reporter and interviewer. It was better to frame you with a source, as you did for one of the sots OR just frame the person speaking into your mic.
-This would have been more interesting with NATS to break up the story.
-ends abuptly, add another line of track to wrap it up or look forward.
-Good topic, great content!
2/26 12:49 pm - The b-roll at the start is ok, but the dolly goes on for a while. I wish I got some closer shots. The interview with the big group seems awkward and I don't love the person holding his own mic. His interview didn't really add much. The b-roll at times doesn't seem purposeful. Don't have a reporter show up holding a mic in the interview.
2/21 2:31 pm - - Very long pan shot in the beginning to another pan.
- Reporter track was very fast – hard to understand
- SOT with 6 people in frame and subject holding the mic does not look good. You should frame out one person and frame it properly, no need to have all those people standing around him.
- Writing – beware of using the word “competition” too many times
- Needed more NATS
- The interviews just didn’t seem to work within a package
- The subject matter was interesting but the shots were very random and not written to video