"Kinesiology" - ID# 486
New Trier
Documentary
Entry Description
Documenting the incredible annual Kinesis performance our dance students showcase!
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- 4/24 9:27 pm - The documentary opens up with beautiful lyrical footage of the dancers. The interview isn't as purposefully composed as it could be, lacks depth, and it does need a little bit of color grading as well. The sequence where you break the fourth wall and you tell the interviewee to look at the camera is a bit odd because it's a visual storytelling cadence that you do not consistently use. Once again please compose your interviews carefully. They should often be privileged on one side of the screen rather than centered - and some of the exposure or iris is off well and there is some softness in some of the interviewees. Overall, good job with the story structure.
- 4/8 8:33 pm - Keepers: I LOVE that you incorporated some "reality broll footage" of the coach coaching as well as other elements. It really works to break up the monotony of multiple talking head interviews. Keep finding ways to work more of that in through nat sound or by micing up the key players for a half hour or so and then seeing what you get out of it. Improvements: In the introduction of the dancers and key players, watch the pacing. It was a bit off from the music and a bit too frantic. Be consistent with your interview setups. Make sure you're using the rule of thirds correctly and that you're framing your shots as medium close ups. Pay closer attention to your backgrounds as well. Some are great, but others, like with Johanna, have a blank wall. Always look to have good depth in your interview backgrounds. Watch the head space as well. In terms of editing, this is something you may have considered adding captions. Since you have so much talking through the broll, it takes the pressure off of having to mix it perfectly. In terms of your visual story, more dance footage was needed. Let's see some of the footage from the final dance performance of the seniors! I think it would land better than all of the crying footage, not to take away from their emotion, but I wanted to see more dancing overall. In terms of the music, the first song was used too much in the piece. Look for other pieces of music with a similar impact emotionally. That keeps the piece from becoming stale. Overall, good visual moments in here. Keep working!
- 3/4 6:37 pm - +opening b-roll footage is attention-grabbing +Good timing the text with the music -first interview could use some lighting -odd framing for interviews. Be sure to use the rule of thirds and think about head room and look space. -stage manager interview needs lighting -Would like to hear more from the dancers
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