Jay Borsom: World Class Quizmaster - ID# 495
Lockport Township
Documentary
Entry Description
A woman attempts to break a Guinness World Record while discovering how she has transformed her community.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/30 4:29 pm - +Interesting topic. Main character is very passionate about what they do. Nice b-roll at the events -In need of more than one interview. Interview background could be improved--maybe something that has to do with the topic or a shot with depth.
- 4/25 8:54 pm - KEEPERS: Cool, unique story about people a lot of us don't always think about! I love pub trivia and love going out and doing that with my friends, so I truly enjoyed that you discovered Jay and told her story. Good interview setup and sound mixing from a production standpoint. Your broll made sense and the editing was well paced. IMPROVEMENTS: From a story standpoint, is this about Jay's attempt to break the quizmaster record or is it about how she's using her platform to affect change in the community? It can be both for sure, but we sort of lose sight of the world record story early on in the documentary and never really circle back to it until the very end. It would be nice to tie it in throughout the story a bit more through soundbytes. Use more nat audio breaks. By this, I mean stop the interview sound and let Jay's voice as a quizmaster shine through for a few seconds. I want to hear them do what they love to do. Another person needed to be interviewed for this story. Perhaps someone from a pub or bar where Jay works or another member of his company, but one other voice at least was needed to sort of round out the story and give it a differing perspective. The description says Jay transformed their community. Hearing from members of that community would tell the complete story. This piece needs more sound in general. Music would help a great deal to drive the emotion a bit more. Without it, it feels almost like an extended natural audio news package.
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