Tyler - ID# 496
Batavia
Seven Day Challenge
Entry Description
A man with a strange book, looks for a reason to get out of his troubles. Why not have someone else do it for him? What could go wrong?
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Judge 1
Positives: Excellent depth of field in camera and your compositing is very clean. It's a simple script which serves you well so you can display your directorial skills. I did not see credits at the end (nice to have to credit your crew!) but if you were the editor as well, these two skills will serve you well in your career-- if that's what you want. The acting is superb and your sound is on a professional level (just watch your plosives.) Very well done. This is a great sample to have for a reel.
Improvements: Overall, your work is very tight. For a piece like this, having a script supervisor on set as your right hand is key. In the bathroom scene, you cross your x axis a few times and lose your eyeline for our actor. For something like this, a stand-in is helpful so we don't lose that eye line. When the eye line is broken, so is the tension. A body double can be used for OTS or dirty shots to add some more texture so you're not relying totally on compositing to sell the premise. Watch your low angle shots as well. If you overuse them, then the feeling of power we get from the character dwindles. Good stuff here, which is why I'm being picky. Well done!
Judge 2
Positives: Excellent!! So many great elements! 1) Really solid lighting and shooting! Like, really really good. 2) Great directing and performance(s)!!!
Improvements: 1) Small audio note - felt some challenges synching dialogue with picture. 2) Some very minor editing hang ups, matching action.
Judge 3
Positives: The piece was unique and creative. The editing was smooth and very well paced. The audio was clear and the dialogue was believable. The variety of camera angles and shots demonstrated a clear skill and a strong level of creativity.
Improvements: The use of lighting might have been a nice touch to convey the mood of the story.
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