Savior - ID# 503

Lockport Township
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description

After discovering a cursed book, an insecure high-schooler creates another version of herself to ask her crush on a date.

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Recent Teacher Comments

  • 4/30 7:47 pm - Nice camera work and lighting here. You clearly were thoughtful in your choices. Audio was clear throughout and there were some solid performances. I can see the string on the book at :54. Maybe a different angle would help with this. There are times when I don't know which one is the clone and which one is the original. I’m not sure if you were intending that, but sometimes it works. There are moments when you are breaking the 180 degree rule. The breakup scene is a good example of this. The characters flip in the frame from shot to shot. Another thing to keep in mind is potentially adding some score here. I think it might take your film to the next level. Nice work. Keep making movies!
  • 4/30 11:16 am - Great shot reverse shot in the opening! The shot selection in general comes across very intentional and smooth. The attention to detail in the props and a set supports the content of the film really well. The performance between the protagonist and her doppelgänger is super convincing. They come across as two different people. That's impressive. The girlfriend and boyfriend montage could be a bit more believable. Just so we really feel the betrayal when the protagonist gets blind sided. Great job overall!
  • 4/29 10:59 am - Strengths: Nice lighting and clarity of visuals. I really loved the purple lighting effect when the main character opened the book. Really beautiful use of candle lighting. Framing of shots was clear and motivated throughout the film. Improvements: I wasn't quite sure of the tone/how I was supposed to feel in the opening sequence. The audio used with the title card almost felt a bit sinister. If that was the vibe, could have had more hints of that in the opening performance (not to give it away, but just to make us question). The reveal of the "clone" character felt too subtle- some of the edits in that outdoor sequence were a little tricky to follow in terms of whether it was the original girl or "clone" talking. Could bring that out more with music, different framing, or a bigger change in performance from the actress.
Judge 1

Positives: I really liked the lighting throughout. Especially in the darker scenes, the lighting of the candles worked to light what we wanted to see. The shots were all set up well and had a purpose.

Improvements: It sounds like you used external mics which I appreciate, but the sound throughout sounded like there was something over the microphone. The story was kind of hard to follow at some points. I think having the characters in different colored clothing would have made it easier to follow.

Judge 2

Positives: Very cool story! I liked the mystery behind it all, and when the main character looked at the phone I was like "uh ohhh" because I felt it coming, which was a good thing! All in all, you made a simple concept very effective based on the writing and the acting.

Improvements: Be sure to check head room on your shots, there were quite a few that had the tops of heads cut off, or barely any room. I'd also say don't be afraid to commit to an ending-- maybe someone is replaced and we're not sure who, but leaving it on a cliffhanger like that feels unsatisfying. Finally, consider the pacing in your edits. Do we need to hold onto a shot that long? Perhaps there are techniques you can utilize in your edit to show the twins interacting better.

Judge 3

Positives: I really love this concept and I think you executed very well. I’d also like to say that whoever you got to play our main character did a very nice job portraying two different personalities and keeping that consistent across the entire film. Very unique premise and I love the themes of Someone who you wish you could be so very well. Done getting that across.

Improvements: My biggest issue with this is the lighting and cinematography. I felt like it left a lot to be desired, and a lot of the scenes felt flat and uninteresting from that viewpoint. I also think you could have spent a bit more time crafting the ending because I was left wanting more, this felt more like an excerpt from a longer piece than a complete work.

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