Candy - ID# 520
Homewood-Flossmoor
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
When he accidentally eats all the Halloween candy, Ewan has to create his own concoction to pass out to the trick or treaters!
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- 4/23 10:44 am - The film looks good. Your last shot is particularly visually interesting. I’m not sure you have much of a narrative here. Your first act works in setting up the problem, and I think the solution of making his own candy is good for comedy. However, there doesn’t seem to be any resolution. The character just continues to be oblivious? There are threads of a pretty interesting idea here. Like, how we don’t always see how we can negatively impact each other. Developing that idea a little more could help fill out the story. Also, what is happening at 1:20?
- 4/22 1:48 pm - DQ’d for Inappropriate joke with the baby in the blender, crosses a weird line. However, there were some fantastic shot choices and really decent establishing shots of our main character. Your variety of shots also helps set the setting but also helps show the most important action. Regarding the audio, your levels between the background and the character speaking voices need to be cleaned up to mix the levels better.
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