The Swap - ID# 553
Shepard High School
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
The student and teacher basically swap roles with the teacher acting like a student you see in school these days during a dream that the student has.
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- 4/23 11:06 am - The idea of a teacher swapping identities with a student is really effective for comedy. The realization that the character has that it is better for everyone if teachers are teachers and students are students is great. Maybe try to set that up more in the first act. I thought this film was going to be about a student who hasn’t turned in their work. Setting up the role reversal earlier might help with narrative. Also, I might avoid the “it was all a dream” scenario in the future. We see that a lot, and there are other, more unique, ways to show the swap and realization. You clearly have a lot of filmmaking skills. Keep making movies!
- 4/22 2:01 pm - This was a big undertaking and commend the team for bringing so many people together to match the vision. I really liked the actor, he was really convincing and natural. You had a nice shot choice when the kid went up to the teacher, helped move it to a different perspective. You have some great audio work with the “teacher’s just don’t understand’ and moving the setting to the kid going to bed was very effective at establishing locations. Great work. As for improvements, the pace of this could be a lot faster. The arguing over assignments in the beginning was pretty long and unnecessary, same when getting her attention. It’s pretty confusing when the girl comes in and the teacher hugs the “bestie”, is that a student or another teacher. Finally, I think there is more room to explore the teacher being a person and doing “teen things” like texting, not paying attention in class, etc. I would have loved to see more from that. Keep at it, you’re on the right track.
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