Into Glowing White - ID# 564
Lyons Township
Seven Day Challenge
Entry Description
The journey of a man so infatuated with technology that he turns into artificial intelligence.
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Recent Teacher Comments
Judge 1
Positives: Very professional production. I like how your cinematographer pulls focus in your frames. Great sound editing and capturing. Editing was very seamless. Love the swiping effect with the teacher into the watch ticking. Your soundscapes convey so much emotion and what a nice touch using an original score (it seems.) Hard to believe this only took 7 days-- definitely use this for a reel!
Improvements: It's so well done it's hard to pick out vast improvements, but if you want to maximize conflict and make the audience root for your lead, give him a relationship. Flesh out the female character and give her something to do so we raise the stakes with our lead. Give him something to lose.
Judge 2
Positives: Great camera work and lighting. It makes a huge impact on watching the film. The edits are tights, and keep a pace of the film moving. There is a such a wide variety of shots that it was great to see what was next. The editing of this film a very strong, Good job with the black and white shots because they can be tough. The scrolling aspect is good as well. Great job on this film from the writing to the shooting to the edits.
Improvements: I am not sure I love the sound of the screen, but it does not take away from the idea.
Judge 3
Positives: The narrative was clear, engaging, and very relevant. The message and visuals that helped move the story along, were strong. The use of sound effects and distortion in the narration helped elevate the plot. Great use of camera angles and creativity throughout!
Improvements: Some shots could have been improved on through lighting elements that helped convey the mood or emotion. Some of the shots were overexposed from behind. Just be aware of the environment including windows behind your subject.
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