The Real World - ID# 569
Lockport Township
Seven Day Challenge
Entry Description
Our character sets out to engage with the real world once the internet goes out.
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Judge 1
Positives: It's an interesting premise with a great turn at then end with your protagonist choosing real life over the internet. I love the primal scream in the beginning with the shot outside of the house. You've got a nice mix of humor and drama which is hard to do in a short amount of time but it feels very natural. I like the warm color correction to make everything feel a little dreamy-- it's a bold choice that works for the story.
Improvements: Watch stability on your handheld shots and don't be afraid to lock some of them off for your closeups. We want to feel the protagonist's panic in the beginning and then his relief in the end and can do that better if the shot is really locked in. That way, when you use hand held during moments of panic, it adds to the tension the audience feels. Good job!
Judge 2
Positives: There are some good shots used during the production, like the bike scene is an example of this. There are some good concepts to this short, and if you tie them together a little bit more the story would be even stronger.
Improvements: The talent needs to be mic'd better so we can hear what they are saying. At times it sounds like the music is battling the actor. The camera keeps changing with the lighting. There is a way to prevent this in your settings. When the camera gets lighter then darker it becomes hard to focus on the message of the film. I am not sure why there is a filter on the edit. I do not think it adds to the message of the film.
Judge 3
Positives: The story was clear and creative. The onscreen graphics were unique and complemented the story well. There were a wide variety of camera angles.
Improvements: Several of the shots could have benefited from a stabilizer, particularly early on in the piece. The use of color was clear however it was distracting and didn't necessarily support the narrative. Several of the camera shots indoors had auto exposure enabled which would change the exposure mid-shot. The sound levels were inconsistent throughout the piece.
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