The Price of Perfection - ID# 574
Deerfield
Seven Day Challenge
Entry Description
After downloading an ordinary app on her phone, a teenage girl seeking perfection gets more than she bargained for.
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Judge 1
Positives: I love your steady tracking shots and you're very confident with your camera movements. Excellent cinematography and your instincts on when to do closeups and inserts are natural. I love the editing in the mirror when Rebecca transforms. It really sets the uneasy and futuristic tone. Your sound editing is lovely as well and adds a lot to the world with echoes and your AI voice. The montage is at the perfect spot at the midpoint and the dad coming in at the flashback is emotional shows a tight script and knowledge of storytelling.
Improvements: Watch the timing on the diner scenes. The script is so good so you can really take the time to breathe in these shots to make them creepier. Don't rush your dialogue. Once we get to the scenes with the dad we can vary the shots and do more closeups to maximize emotions. You take us there, but if you go a little farther, the audience will truly feel catharsis at the end.
Judge 2
Positives: I like how you capture the challenges of being a teen, and the pressures that you face to change who you might be. The use of effects is strong, and supports the film. Good job on the sound effects and matching them to the edits. The pacing is strong and keeps the film moving The wide variety of shots is good. Great ending shot and end to the film. Good job on this quick production.
Improvements: There are times the audio could be strong in the diner scenes. The lighting in the diner is not as strong as other parts of the film. Try to find a way to make it equal with the rest of the production so that it does not become a distraction.
Judge 3
Positives: The editing throughout was strong and the quick cuts at certain points helped convey the emotion of the story. The story was strong and well-supported through realistic locations.
Improvements: The audio could have been cleaner and benefitted from a denoiser. The outside shots were a little pink and could have used color correcting. Some of the diner shots were also a bit dark so the exposer could have been increased.
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