Facade - 7-Day Challenge - ID# 573
Elk Grove High School
Seven Day Challenge
Entry Description
"Facade" 7-day challenge by Matthew Luptak
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Judge 1
Positives: I like that you had a simple story that you executed well. You didn't try to do too much in four minutes so the story was engaging and easy to follow. It's a fun reveal of using the showroom of Ikea for our crypto influencer and the end joke is great writing to show how easy it is to pay off the other characters. I liked how you framed your shots and your natural lighting read well on camera. Sound was captured nicely in the car as well.
Improvements: Keep an ear on how your location audio transitions into ADR or foley. For example, if you’ve got an establishing shot with no dialogue, it’s usually best to drop the on-set sound and use your soundtrack or ambient effects instead. That way, you’re not accidentally bringing in things like traffic noise right before cutting to a quiet interior.
Judge 2
Positives: Strong job on the audio. I like how you captured the audio in the car and had the shot outside. The only thing to look at is the fading of music and sound effects. Great job on the wide variety of shots. This adds to the depth of your film, and allows you to do so many more creative edits. Good job on creating this film in 7 days.
Improvements: This is hard to call it a thing to be improved upon, but when you don't control the lighting (in IKEA), it makes it hard to have strong lighting. The car shot in the lot is another example of lighting that could be stronger. Inside a car try to use a light from a phone to make it work. I wish there was a better link to the opening character. I think he is the boss for the two in the car, but I am not totally sure. Maybe I just missed that. It just is something that could be tightened up.
Judge 3
Positives: The story was unique and memorable through different scenes like the shots in Ikea. The music choices throughout clearly had purpose and connected with the story however the transitions out of the different tracks could have been smoother. There were a variety of camera shots and angles, all visually pleasing and showed a level of creativity and skill.
Improvements: The music transitions could have been cleaner and I think this piece could have benefitted from sound effects. The editing could have been stronger through quicker cuts.
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