Paper Pal - ID# 6
Wheaton North
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
Paper Pal tries to get a snack from the vending machine!
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/30 4:42 pm - Cute concept. Some of the shots were a bit too long so the audience kind of loses interest. Instead of having the character set up the tripod, it might've been more believable if the character used the tripod bag as a stool. The character design is adorable!
- 4/16 3:12 pm - Interesting concept, and clever ideas for telling the story from the perspective of a paper character. The string being visible kind of fights against the suspension of disbelief that is needed for this - otherwise it works. The music feels out of place and probably could be replaced with something lighter to make this feel more fun. Story-wise, there isn't much at stake or a hook aside from the paper aesthetic. I'm not totally convinced this isn't a backup plan after your actor canceled on you at the last minute. Good effort though!
Judge 1
Positives: I always love to see narratives that can tell a clear story without dialogue. Telling a story visually like you did here is not easy! Good shot variety! Very creative usage of using an inanimate object as the lead character.
Improvements: The editing pacing overall could be even a tiny bit quicker. The opening shot went on a little too long. Maybe cut it a hair shorter.
Judge 2
Positives: Great shot. Very creative. Had a straight forward story. Over came your obstacles with the story to the best of your ability. The puppeteering was also very creative, and I can tell some consideration was put into your production value outside of manipulating something in a computer.
Improvements: I can tell this was made on your own or a very skeleton crew. I have been there too. In fact, I think that’s going to be a bonus in my scoring of you. My Only note is that if you do choose to make everything by yourself, get more involved in front of the camera to increase what is referred to in the moving image as scope. Great job!
Judge 3
Positives: Creative use of a 2D drawing. Loved the various expressions on the little guy. Great work. Keep making movies!
Improvements: This was a very straightforward and simple narrative, so I think you could probably work a few more little gags or jokes in there to fill out the experience a bit more. Where did the little guy get the money from? Perhaps that could've been an additional segment with some fun involved.
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