For My Sister - ID# 65
Barrington
Documentary
Entry Description
A heartfelt short film exploring the complexities of a sister relationship, capturing the love and unspoken understanding that shapes such a bond.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/6 1:44 pm - KEEPERS: It's clear this is a personal story with a lot of meaning for you. You did well with it and it's something you will always have for your family. The broll shots were very good and I liked the cutaways to nature in certain spots and the footage you have captures the relationship to your sister very well. IMPROVEMENTS: From a story perspective, as meaningful as this is to you and your family, it's not necessarily impactful to a broader audience. The message of strong family bonds definitely lands, but without additional conflict, it's not going to have the broader appeal you're looking for in a documentary. We never saw your mom in the opening during her interview. In general, you always want to show the face of your interview subject at least once. Use a tripod for your interview set ups. Also make the set up for each sister different. Follow the rule of thirds and put one sister on one side of the frame and then flip the side for the other sister. This subtle difference keeps the fooage looking fresher for the audience. Consider capturing broll of you and your sister walking through some of those beautiful environments you captured.
- 3/4 9:50 am - What Worked Well: ✅ Deeply Personal & Meaningful Story – The best documentaries are personal, and this one does a great job of letting the audience into your relationship with your sister. ✅ Effective Use of Personal Photos – Incorporating pictures of you and your sister adds authenticity and emotional depth. ✅ Clever Bookending with Phone Call – Starting and ending with what feels like a phone call to your sister is a strong storytelling choice that ties the piece together. Areas for Improvement: Enhancing Photo Presentation – Rather than just scanning in photos, consider creative ways to present them (e.g., slow zooms, layered textures, motion effects) to add drama and visual interest. Polishing Interview Setups – While the run-and-gun style fits the tone, a more polished setup (better lighting, framing, and background control) would improve the production value. B-Roll Variety & Production Time – The b-roll, though effective, appears to have been shot all in one day, with subjects wearing the same outfits in every scene. Spreading out the shoot and capturing more varied footage would add depth and realism. Stronger Story Arc – While the content is compelling, structuring the narrative more clearly (a beginning, middle, and emotional resolution) could make the documentary even more engaging. This is a powerful and heartfelt piece—refining the production value and narrative arc will help take it to the next level!
- 2/24 2:07 pm - STORY: I like this because it’s very personal. But honestly, because this is a very personal video, it doesn’t appeal to anyone outside of your own family. No matter what happens with the MMEA Video Festival, you will treasure this video someday. When I was your age, I made a video about my family. It wasn’t ever in any festivals, but it is literally a treasure to my family now, because my parents have passed away and all of their grandkids can now see and hear them in that video I made 30 years ago. PRODUCTION: production wise, this is okay. Your audio is fine, your b-roll is very nice. Your shots are fine. Technically some of the exposure and/or lighting was a bit dim, but overall a nice video from a technical perspective.
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