Veteran's Day - ID# 84
Barrington
Documentary
Entry Description
This segment highlights and celebrates the veterans in the community of Barrington High School as well as teaching students about their service.
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- 4/8 9:00 pm - KEEPERS: Nice work with the interviews in terms of capturing the stories of veterans. This can be tricky to do because some veterans won't be as open due to trauma during service, etc. Great job as a story producer in that manner. The interviews are well lit and focused. Backgrounds are solid. The audio mix is done well. IMPROVEMENTS: Set up your story a bit more at the top with text. Provide the full context of what you're doing and why. This Veteran's Day we reached out to staff members at BHS that proudly and honorably served America. These are their stories." Something like that provides all the context necessary for the audience. In terms of your editing, pace your broll cutaways better. Many of your shots were not on screen long enough. When photos are your primary source of broll, you want to linger on them and really let the audience get a sense of what they're looking at during the documentary. When you scale/zoom into photos, do it with purpose - sometimes it felt like the zooms lacked direction. Like any editing decision, make all scale effects purposeful. The music was very redundant. You had one song. I would argue you needed three. One for an introduction, one for middle third during the stories of each veteran and one for the final third as they explain why they served, how it led to their careers, advice for others, etc. Use music to help drive emotion and use it to make things more emotional. Also use brief pauses wihtout music to give the piece moments to breathe. Overall, this has a lot of potential. Keep working on editing nuances and keep telling stories!
- 2/24 2:38 pm - STORY: Interesting personal narratives about their military experiences and the insights they have. PRODUCTION: Interview framing and sound is good across the board, and your mix of the audio, overall, is good. The music bed wasn’t overpowering. The only thing that is really lacking is the b-roll. You have minimal b-roll, and even when you do bring in the b-roll of photos, sometimes you didn’t leave it on the screen long enough. So, more b-roll and longer duration of b-roll.
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