Silent Film - ID# 85
Barrington
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
this short film depicts a teenage girl coming to terms with how quickly high school passes by students.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 10:05 am - Very strong opening shot, excellent titling, and impressive visual storytelling through character/acting and the calendar. Excellent composition and use of manual settings. At :40, the shaky camerawork took me out of it and didn't match the rest of the film. While the title may be "Silent Film," I think that a music background could have helped tie in the themes and pace together. This is a very well crafted story, but with 10 points in the rubric going to sound, there being absolutely none works against it for this festival. Perhaps this was made for a class or other festival with strict audio guidelines – but I would at minimum have recommended adding music to the cut for this fest. Overall, very professional, polished, and engaging footage and edit. You are very talented. I look forward to seeing what else you make in the future!
- 3/14 10:15 am - Strong visual storytelling - you show a lot of parallels between the years, and I like that the calendar was keeping track of where she is in her high school experience. Nice cinematography. I like the shot when she walks into focus at 0:27. You have some great matching shots too. Framing the shots the same way in different periods of her life and using match cuts is a great way to show the passage of time. I will say that needs some sort of sound track. It's a little bit awkward watching a film without any sort of sound - it feels like it's missing something. Maybe you add in some sound effects, maybe just music, or ambient noise, but you need something.
- 3/3 10:52 am - To show the passage of time - 4 years of it - is really very ambitious, and I am not sure if your intention was to show 1 year or 4 years. The calendar is one way of doing it. I am not sure if you used one actor or more - the young women look so similar it's hard to tell them apart. I am not clear about the lack of sound - was it supposed to mean something?
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