Student Pilot - ID# 90
Deerfield
Natural Audio News Package
Entry Description
Like all high schoolers, Preston Ettin is busy with school work and activities. But his passion for aviation keeps him flying high as a student pilot.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 3:43 pm - I thought the story you were telling was great, your b-roll was creative and diverse, but it took 49 seconds to hear any aviation sounds. I would have loved something sooner, and then sadly that was it. Your story was excellent, and you have an eye for good visual storytelling, but in a natural sound category make sure you are putting in some natural sounds.
- 3/25 7:01 am - The natural audio of the plane starting up was great! Would have loved to have heard more natural audio of various things in this story. What about hearing the communication between the pilot and the control tower (or at least of the pilot in the plane). What about other sounds as the pilot is doing their pre-flight check? My parents both flew so I know there are more sounds that you could have recorded. The interview looked and sounded great. Glad you interviewed his instructor - that was good information to add to this story. The shot that started in the hallway of the school confused me until the end of that shot when it stopped on the Science sign. The science teacher was a great addition to this story as well - nice tie in between a hobby and what students are learning in school. The b-roll shots of science glassware and the posters didn’t really fit with this story. Once we see the instructor, there is no need to go back to them for just one second - cover that up with b-roll. The key to this category is the natural sound - what other types of natural sound could you have used to help tell the story and move it forward?
- 3/4 11:30 am - This was such a unique story! I loved hearing from the student pilot and also love that you got an interview with the physics teacher. The variety of b-roll was also impressive. I loved hearing the sounds of the airplane engine starting up. My only suggestion is that I would have loved to have heard even more examples of nat audio that go into flying a plane. Otherwise, this was a very professional and engaging piece.
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