Silver

Try Softs [TRAILER]

Neuqua Valley

Animation Computer

Entry Description

A trailer for a an animated Flash series about 2 students who were try-hards all through high school. When they get a letter from their dream college, things change and they decide to go through Senior their way.

Judge 1

Positives: Excellent voice syncing, interesting characters, very good color scheme.

Improvements: Try to introduce these characters as more clean cut and studious H.S. seniors who have suddenly been granted freedom from school. What sort of a metamorphosis can they go through to become irreverent goofballs? If this is a trailer you have to set up the characters so your audience will know who they are and what they could become after being accepted to Harvard.

Judge 2

Positives: Interesting premise. Seems like fun characters.

Improvements: Would have liked to see more. Character's proportions were way off, and could have benefited from a more cartoony look to them.

Judge 3

Positives: Nice pertinent idea - good use of all types of shots. Decent compositions.

Improvements: The ending isn't there... how do they blow off senior year... so much could have been done. Write more - storyboard it and share it with individuals in your target audience.