Gold

Brianna Sharp

Neuqua Valley

Feature Story

Entry Description

This story is about a girl named Brianna Sharp, who passed away in July before she would have entered the eighth grade. This story explains Brianna's battle with cancer, how it affected her friends and family, and what people can do to support her legacy.

Judge 1

Positives: This is a tough subject to have to report so I immediately have respect for the attempt to do so. It was a poignant piece that used photos of Brianna tastefully.

Improvements: An ID for the reporter at the end would have improve the piece. A graphic re: how one could help or donate would have improved the piece.

Judge 2

Positives: You used the photos you have of Brianna in an effective way zooming in and out. You let people know how they could contribute to her memory.

Improvements: Your interviews were shot in shadow or not white balanced. You should have lit the interviews better and white balanced the camera. You should have done a graphic full screen of how people could contribute to her memory.

Judge 3

Positives: This was a very moving story. The use of several different sound bites helped enhance the story. The editing was smooth and helped the story flow.

Improvements: The use of music could help enhance the emotion in the story - just adds a nice extra touch. The stand-up close at the end of the piece felt just a little stiff - maybe a little walking at the beginning and then stop for the last part of the stand up would help. Very nice work!