Gold

One Salon

Batavia

Commercial

Entry Description

A commercial for the One Salon in St. Charles showing all of the endless opportunities for your makeup and hair.

Judge 1

Positives: Good titles selling points

Improvements: More narration and steady shots

Judge 2

Positives: Nice use of close up shots, and fade outs. Narration and visual imagery was effective in creating appeal for product.

Improvements: A few shots were fuzzy. Text over the imagery could have been executed better.

Judge 3

Positives: Quick cutting helped show case a lot about the salon. The depth of field shots that played with the focus were a nice touch.

Improvements: While the quick cutting helped with the lack of action, the commercial still seemed kind of bland. I'd also like so see maybe a before and after shot. Show me a finished product.