Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

In this thriller, what starts as a normal date night turns Abnormal.

Judge 1

Positives: interesting premise. some good suspenseful moments.

Improvements: too much dead time while driving. lighting

Judge 2

Positives: Good use of music to heighten anticipation, fear/emotion. Title and credit sequence animation is very professionally done.

Improvements: Sounds quality in opening scene seemed muffled. Not sure of the entire length of the piece or if this is the entire piece but it seems like there's something missing to get to the end. If confusion about what happened is the goal, then the goal was achieved.

Judge 3

Positives: Story setup through dialogue worked well. Use of music to set and change the mood worked well. Choice of "shooting" time (nighttime...snow) added to the drama

Improvements: A little more attention to editing toward the end of the story. It seemed rushed...more time for "realization of the character" as to what has happened or not happened.... The music, while dynamic, almost overpowered the story to the point that the audience might lose the visual effects.