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Sag-Humorous Narrative-O

Hinsdale Central

Humorous Narrative

Entry Description

humorous narrative about sagging

Judge 1

Positives: For any adult rating this video, you automatically get bonus points for pointing out how stupid "sagging" is! The cuts made in editing were good as I didn't feel any scene was too long. The ending was funny with the pants being worn too high.

Improvements: There was more drama here than humor. If you had gone over the top a bit with some of the scenes this would have been much funnier. Maybe get a teacher to sag? Also, this was all shot within the school. More variety in the setting would make the video more interesting. In the scene where the person's identity was being protected, more could be done in the editing to make it more humorous. It is easy to "block out" someones face rather than just make the shot out of focus.

Judge 2

Positives: The doctored audio/video to protect the identity of a sagger gave me the scene I needed for the PSA theme to work. It gave the video a little credibility. The main character was believable.

Improvements: The heart beat sound effect during sagging cutaways didn't match the narrative. The music bed could have carried the idea. A couple of the head shot cutaways appeared too staged. It caused a shift from serious but tongue-in-cheek from some cutaways, to slapstick. Make them consistent throughout.

Judge 3

Positives: This is so simplistic and basic in telling the story and worked perfectly because of it...narrator was perfect choice, and the blurring obscure was creative and funny

Improvements: The color & lighting could have been balanced better, but otherwise and awesome job!