Silver

My Phone Addiction

Lake Forest

Humorous Narrative

Entry Description

Kids these days... and their phones.

Judge 1

Positives: Hilarious idea. Short and to the point. Love it. Mr. Gigiano is an awesome actor. His dry humor is amazing. Smooth voice over for the most part. It really kept my engaged in the story.

Improvements: That first quick flash of the interview was a little jarring. I dont think the piece needed it really. Or it could have used more to create a theme. A tripod on a lot of those hallway shots would have had a greater effect of time passing.

Judge 2

Positives: Good shot selections. Really liked the shot of the elevator closing while the lead passed through frame. Can see thought was put into shots instead of using basic coverage.

Improvements: Always check the focus of images for each shot. Make sure whatever image you are focusing on in frame is crisp and clear unless done for creative reasons of course. Example being the insert shots of the phone. Also whenever you are doing voice overs make sure the levels on all other sound like effects and music aren't higher than your vo tracks. It was difficult to hear the voice over when the phone rang.

Judge 3

Positives: Short & concise. Got the point of your story across effectively. Nice insert shots of the game. Additionally the camera work while walking was nice. It would have been fun if he actually walked into the camera. Fun ending. wrapped up the story nicely.

Improvements: I think that your concept was good but I think there were a lot of missed opportunities for humor. Once you think of a concept try breaking it and taking it one step further. I think you'll be surprised with the outcome.