2nd Place :: Division A

The Train

Lake Forest

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

The story of one girl dealing with the internal and external challenges of adolescence in a culture that is being rocked by suicides.

Judge 1

Positives: excellent premise. some good camera shots.

Improvements: at times hard to follow storyline.

Judge 2

Positives: Extremely important and substantive story told in realistic dialogue helping to capture the angst, the fears, the despair, the losses of young people too overcome by the present to believe in the future. Good use of music to help set the emotional tenor of the piece.

Improvements: Some lighting and camera shots could use tightening but nothing that really distracts from the piece.

Judge 3

Positives: Strong story concept Excellent shooting and editing

Improvements: Music backgaround could have moved story line along more efficiently