Bronze

The making of a State Swimming champion

Lake Forest

Documentary

Entry Description

The story of a great junior swimmer working to become a Championship caliber swimmer

Judge 1

Positives: Good use of b-roll to cover the interview. Like the clean look of the piece.

Improvements: Interviewer and lower third at the top needed longer lower third and establishing shot of who he is. Change the music when you're changing the topic of conversation to show change. It got distracting at times. The order and placement of school logos was a bit awkward.

Judge 2

Positives: good use of music; good b-roll.

Improvements: jump cuts were distracting- could have used a white flash or other transition at those points; chroma key going from white to black briefly at 1:12-would also recommend another color besides white.

Judge 3

Positives: Good use of white background during interviews. Good use of live footage.

Improvements: Splice could be smoother. More interviews from others to get their perspectives.