Silver

BHS Olympics

Barrington

Humorous Narrative

Entry Description

Barrington Olympic parody

Judge 1

Positives: Great concept. Once the bell rang, I needed to know how fast they could get that coffee there. I love abrupt comedic endings. Loved it. The watermark logo was a nice touch.

Improvements: Try writing a script for the voice over. While the VO announcers had some pretty funny moments, it may have sounded smoother and tighter if the ideas were written on paper. Thats about it!

Judge 2

Positives: Great dialogue. Love the dry one liner comments. Very creative structure in telling the story. Very original.

Improvements: I wish the announcers had a little more energy. There were great lines of dialogue that could have had a bigger payoff.

Judge 3

Positives: The titles were very nice and incorporating them into the environment was a nice touch. The editing and jump cuts for changes in wardrobe was a cool stylistic choice.

Improvements: I think this piece was put together nicely with some interesting creativity, I was hoping for a bigger punch-line to enhance the "epic" feel of the Coffee Olympics. It may have been nice to see some audience members in the background cheering on your olympic team. May have given the piece a bigger feel to see everyone routing on this race.