1st Place :: Division A



Glenbrook South
Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

"Keylog" is a dramatic narrative about two teenagers in the months before leaving for college.

Judge 1

Positives: interesting philosophic overtones. some fascinating, well-written dialogue.

Improvements: opening moment

Judge 2

Positives: The dialogue is very realistic, believable and well-delivered. The surprise ending is really unexpected and the camerawork and editing helps enhance the dramatic effect

Improvements: The audio sometimes sounds a little muffled, but each word is heard. Some of the wide shots of the room could be shot a little tighter.

Judge 3

Positives: Good dialogue writing Creative approach with surprise ending

Improvements: Pace could have been faster In editing....more close ups of facial expressions...especially when the letter is being read