Air

Hillcrest

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

Two enemies team up to take back what is theirs.

Judge 1

Positives: 1. Was an original idea to take what seems to be an inspirational speech and underlay it with music under the entire video. 2. The music fit the story they were trying to tell.

Improvements: 1. The story was a little hard to follow. One person takes the ball from another. Then a third takes the ball from the second. The first and second person team up to take it back? Perhaps dialogue would have worked in a couple scenes to help translate what the filmmakers were going for with this story. 2. The ending fell a little flat. You build up by having this training montage. The first two guys go to challenge the third and then it ends? Resolution would have helped if they actually won or showed some sort of ending at all.

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