On The Run

Highland Park

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

A girl is on the run for a murder. Will she be able to live on her own? She she be caught? Will she survive while on the run?

Judge 1

Positives: * Good use of dramatic music.

Improvements: * Sound mixing issues throughout. The fiddling noises in the intro sequence, for example, are too loud. * Too much audio hiss throughout. * I wanted a more powerful ending than her just looking at the knife.

Judge 2

Positives: Visual storytelling that uses gesture and action to tell the story was effective. The performance was terrific to watch.

Improvements: Think about how cinematography works to highlight a strong performance. Be sure to double check exposure and don't be afraid to play with different compositions and shot scales.

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