Admitting Defeat

Lyons Township

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

A surreal story concerning one young man's existential dilemma.

Judge 1

Positives: * Interesting use of the lead actor talking to different versions of himself with different camera angles.

Improvements: * Too much audio hiss throughout. * The YouTube videos are too loud. * The on-screen timestamps don't add to the story. We start at 7:48 a.m. but also end at 7:48 a.m., so no time has elapsed?

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