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Homewood-Flossmoor

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

When things go wrong at school.

Judge 1

Positives: Lots to like here. You have clearly delineated characters and you get solid performances from your actors. The story is appropriate in scope for the 5 minute time limit and feels complete. Good use of sound- levels are generally good, effective sound FX, and I like your music. I think your strongest element is your editing. Effective use of titles, filters, and (I'm guessing) After Effects. Your pacing is quite good, especially once things are set in motion with Cain getting hit with the water bottle. If you haven't seen 3 O'Clock High, check it out. I think you'd like it.

Improvements: Your camera work is solid, but I'd say that's the area to keep working on. Pay attention to the 180 degree rule. The scene in the kitchen, for example, is back an forth several times, which is just a bit confusing. Careful with backlighting as well. Again in the kitchen, Kevin was positioned right in front of a bright window. The standoff between Cain and Craig could probably have been shot to heighten the suspense a bit more. But keep in mind that I'm nit-picking here. I really like this and think it showcases a lot of talent. Kudos.

Judge 2

Positives: * Excellent special effects (especially the Batman-esque throwback). * Excellent camera work. * Funny ending.

Improvements: * Remove audio hiss. * Sometimes hard to hear the dialogue.

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