Man's Greatest Downfall

Batavia

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

Mark attempts to ask Courtney on a date, but the different sides of his brain keep getting in the way of his success.

Judge 1

Positives: - Very creative story and a well observed way to approach how we constantly battle ourselves in our own mind. - Good use of varying camera angles and techniques such as the rack focus out of the fridge.

Improvements: - Sound design, while audible, can use some improvements. Wind is never an easy factor to deal with. Not all mics are all purpose mics, and choosing the right equipment for the right situation will always make the overall project better. If equipment options are limited, I suggest checking out some internet video forums or books that show how to make your own attachments such as windscreens. Also be sure to get at least 30 seconds of room tone in each location. This audio can then be laid underneath your other audio layers to cover those mic pops. - While multi-angle shots make the scene more dynamic, be careful to re-adjust lighting so that all angles are properly lit.

Judge 2

Positives: So, you're a fan of Herman's Head and Inside Out. :-) Clever concept.

Improvements: * Why do we see Mark's left brain reading from a script? * Clean up excess noise (especially wind).

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