Sometimes, Maybe

Neuqua Valley

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

Inevitably, we all get busier as we grow older. While packing for college, Anna stumbles upon a mysterious letter that seems to hold her back.

Judge 1

Positives: This director takes his/her time with shots, let's things happen, trusts that we will find what is in the frame interesting. The cinematography really stands out. The locations and characters are well chosen and the drama/stakes come across well.

Improvements: My suggestion would be to simplify the letter and let the words have as much impact as the images. Maybe the letter is half as long, but hits us harder. This would address the 2nd issue I have which is that it starts to feel a little repetitive--both visually and the letter. If this piece were shaved down to 3.5 or even 4 minutes, it might be more effective.

Judge 2

Positives: NAILED IT wow. Where do i begin. You use of past and present story was perfect, there wasn't a point i was confused. The story was clear and crisp and to the point. you took 5 mins to tell a delightful dramatic story about not to lose our childhood to soon. You're editing was top notch, and you could put a clinic on to other contestants on how great editing will make your project.Well done.

Improvements: Older sister character, we could have seen her in different dramatic poses, i feel like the pose of grabbing her upper nose was used to much I.e. Dazed and Confused.

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