Closer

Batavia

Music Video

Entry Description

An art student dreams of her days of fame and fortune.

Judge 1

Positives: The editing moves great with the music and the cuts to the horns are done well. Lip syncing is done better then most. Lighting on all shots are pretty good.

Improvements: Ends abruptly and the story could develop a little more. You don't show very well that she is an art student.

Judge 2

Positives: Nice variety of locations and looks. Some of your black and white shots are stunning - especially in front of the lyric opera! The dissolves with instrument close-ups and details were a nice way to add visual interest.

Improvements: Editing-wise, there's one conspicuous music edit that is distracting. It wasn't always clear whether she was dreaming about the future or living in the present. The different looks you used were interesting, but it might have been more cohesive to apply one look per location, rather than use many looks for each location. Maybe her dreams of the future in black and white, and the present in color?

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