Lottery

Maine South

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

Winning the Lottery can be a dream come true.

Judge 1

Positives: The opening draws you in right away. Nice use of the narrator's voice and freeze frame when intruding the other characters. Nice wide of him running at 4:20

Improvements: I'd like to get a good luck at Mary (since she is the main character's object of desire.) 1:58 Purple artifact 2:21 Very short reverse shot, feels like a mistake I can't tell what the tone of this piece is. Is the main character frightened of the hostage takers, does he suspect they are his buddies? The ending is confusing to me. Is he meeting Mary at the movie theater.

Judge 2

Positives: Seemed like you had a great idea for the story. you're friends dialogue was funny and drove the story.

Improvements: The editing needed to tighter, and to give the feeling of past mixing with the kidnapping i feel like the use of sound editing/design could have conveyed the stressful emotion. Your actors kept looking into the camera, its a tough battle, but need to view your shots as you shoot them.

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