Homecoming Parade

Franklin High School

News Package

Entry Description

Every year Franklin's classes compete in a float building contest for the Homecoming parade. This new package highlights the friendly competition.

Judge 1

Positives: Nice turns of phrase, "caged up" "Monkey around" a hallmark of good television writing.

Improvements: This piece is too short. It is an artful list of the participants but tells no story. We need interviews, need to know why people are involved, etc.

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