A Deadly Run

West Chicago

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

Jilted by his ex-girlfriend, one young man waits patiently for her to pass his home on her daily run so as to exact his revenge. But is this just what she's been expecting all along? This is the question at the heart of this original drama.

Judge 1

Positives: Clear plot - simple story, 2 people, easy to understand what's happening once he puts on the glove. The profile shot where he is looking out of the window - great shot. Wonderful lighting on his face.

Improvements: Camera movement was jerky. Lock it down or stabilize it a little. Choose the best hight to film from - the height of the camera operator shouldn't determine the camera height. Not sure on the decision to go without sound - a subtle soundtrack could have kept it as eerie without making me think maybe my speakers weren't on.

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