Epoch

Waubonsie Valley

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

A man deals with the loss of his brother, who committed suicide.

Judge 1

Positives: 1. The cinematography and dark tone of the shot choices worked very well. You knew right from the start that this was a very solemn and gloom story. 2. The filmmakers chose a perfect score to underlay under the entire film. Matched the story they were trying to tell tremendously.

Improvements: 1. The resolution of the story needed some work. We tell the story of the guilt of a brother blaming himself for his brother's suicide. That's a great story. However, that drives him to his own suicide? Felt like there was a better ending option out there. 2. The filmmaker did a great job of making every second count, however if they used an extra 30 seconds perhaps they could have created more of an arc for the main character.

Judge 2

Positives: I really loved that you keep the audience in the black, quick cuts but majority is in black...Leaves us to mentally manifest was is going on. To create more drama in out brain. Lovely. Your use of sound drives home the emotion. good work

Improvements: you started in the beginning keep the audience in the dark and not really letting on what was going on, but then at the end it got a tad predictable.

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