The Ghost of Eduardo's Past - ID# 132
Morton East
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
A dramatic narrative video production that tells the story of a student who has to face the separation of his past. Little does he know that it would be his greatest regret.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/2 3:16 pm - I feel like this took a while to get going. Initially, Eduardo shows little to no reaction to the weird flashes of himself that he sees. Then he suddenly gets freaked out. Seemed random to me, but this is when it started to get more interesting to me. I think you took good advantage of an empty school and show a keen eye for interesting composition. Some of your lower light shots were pretty grainy (especially in your final sequence outside), but some of your better lighted shots were crisp and contrasty with interesting patterns. There’s not a lot of camera movement which actually works for me. I get tired of watching shaky cam shots or poorly executed handheld. Sometimes it’s very effective to put your camera on sticks and let your subject exit frame and just cut to the next shot in the sequence. Good for you. I like your music, and your levels sound good. You editing is solid, and I like your pacing- especially after the slow opening (which I still think could be tightened up). I’m not sure I love the payoff at the end, but I see flashes of interesting, unique filmmaking here. Keep at it.
- 2/23 1:58 pm - STORY: The story was pretty easy to follow, but the ending was a bit shallow. What happened to Eduardo when he finally confronted his ghost? Why was his ghost haunting him? Was it real or a dream? The ending was too ambiguous. SOUND: That music bed was okay for this piece; kind of mysterious and dramatic. But there was no dialogue or voice over, and no sound effects. More of these sounds would have added some depth to your piece. CAMERA: Nice use of space in the school. You found some cool locations and really set up some nice compositions (the stairwell shots were dope!), shooting from different angles. Nice shots with the books in the library. LIGHTING: A few shots weren't lit appropriately (like the first close up to Eduardo reacting to seeing the flash of his ghost) which resulted in your shot being noisy and out of focus. EDITING: Most of your edits were clean and your pacing was very appropriate. When the pace of the action picks up (when Eduardo starts running, for example) you should consider cutting from one shot to the next a lot faster to match the action.
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