How To Make a Battery - ID# 144

Oak Park River Forest

Demonstration

Entry Description

How to make a battery.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/27 9:17 pm - Great work! Engaging style and tutorial voice- used to narrate an interesting topic. Some of the b-roll shots outside of the tutorial weren’t as engaging, but, I really liked your overall piece.
• 3/7 11:37 am - Great idea and nicely produced demo. Nice shots and use of v/o narration. Maybe list all items needed upfront and do something fun with the diagrams since they go by too fast to understand. Try to avoid fast motion and consider other methods to compress time. Ends abruptly-perhaps spend some time on what the point of this is-why should we learn this? Nice job.
• 3/7 10:49 am - Excellent work, overall. I really appreciated being educated as you unrolled your demonstration of the battery. Everything was thoroughly explained. Shots, lighting and audio were all done well and added to the clarity of the piece. The diagrams and formulas were a welcome addition to the piece, but the fonts chosen were a bit thin. These needed to pop more off the screen to match the overall look of the program. Also, while I appreciate the credits at the end of the show, it wasn't really necessary. If you really wanted them in there, you should have designed them better and scrolled them slower. You had an extra minute to play with, so they could have been done better. Overall, this was an excellent project.

Judge 1

Positives: Nice work with a difficult subject. Script made it easier to understand. Simple props worked well.

Improvements: Some graphics hard to read. A bit fast to really understand what was going on.

Judge 2

Positives: The beginning was excellent. The visuals really pulled me in and I believed I could create a battery myself. The lighting was good and it had a feeling of magic.

Improvements: If you can use Vinegar to make the battery work...please say it. The material got dry in the second half...I know you could make it as clever as the begining.

Judge 3

Positives: There was a good flow to the story. The time compression was effective. It allowed you to demonstrate the steps you were illustrating without belaboring the action. The camera angles worked well to help tell your story.

Improvements: At about :36 there was an abrupt lighting shift. Be consistent wth lighting and colors. The colors become more distinct at that point. But the shadows being cast by the hand were too dark. Add a little fill light to keep the shadows from being so dark. With softer shadows the lighting for this sequence would look great.

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