Faceless - ID# 179

Lyons Township

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

This is a dramatic short film about a young man who is caught between being a kid and feeling pressure to be the man of the house. His conflict ultimately pushes him to make a regrettable decision.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/27 4:03 pm - In general, your piece is characterized by excellent cinematography. Your opening scene is quite strong, but the remainder of the piece does not demonstrate the same dynamic quality. Continue to work on your story character and story development. What might you have done to help your viewer gain a better sense of why Owen responded in such a dramatic way to this family problem?
• 3/7 9:02 am - Good music. Match cuts. Light? Pajamas for sleeping? Door open instead of closed when person walked in.
• 3/4 12:52 pm - Great cinematography Great sound Maybe could have used music in middle Story not clear in end, probably by design. Suicide? If so, needed more buildup to get there. Not suicide? Not clear what the progression is.

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