Mug Me If You Can - ID# 193

Tinley Park

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

When a hungry young man is in need of money he turns to the internet to ask what to do

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/7 8:17 am - The transition from no audio to audio was problematic. The audio levels seem high. The camera work is nice, and some good rack focus shots. However, at other times it was a bit erratic. I think this was a good concept but some good material left behind.
• 2/27 3:44 pm - You have some really nice camera work- a couple nice rack focus shot, your opening POV shot of his wallet- combined with some fairly lazy work that ends up making this feel very amateurish. (Which it is, but my point is that I see flashes of quality work that are undermined by silly dialogue, illogical behavior, very rough exaggerated audio cues, jarring transitions, etc.) And maybe I’m dense, but I didn’t get the ending. Bottom line: I think you have talent, but I don’t think enough effort was put into this to make it a real contender.

Judge 1

Positives: Good use of text graphic effects. The sound effects were effective.

Improvements: Some hot video mixed with dark making for tough edits. Music bed a little overpowering at times.

Judge 2

Positives: Nice title sequence (Mug Me If You Can On brick wall). This laundry list of criticism below is not intended to break your spirit -- this piece had a sophistication to it that I really, really liked. When I watched it a second time, I really got what you were going for. I want encourage all involved to keep being creative. I see what you're doing here.

Improvements: Changing up locations for each attack would’ve given the story a little more scope. Post sound work was a little choppy and took me out of it at times. Story wise, had a tough time following the story. Didn’t know he was hungry until I read the log line.

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