VEI Class at Waubonsie - ID# 203

Waubonsie Valley

News Package

Entry Description

News story about Waubonsie Valley's Virtual Enterprise International course.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/7 11:32 am - The opening of this package was creative, well written, and shot. The writing was excellent. The transitions between sound bites and voice overs were executed properly until the end of the piece where there were just back to back soundbites. The voice over was excellent and engaging.
• 3/5 3:51 pm - This was well shot and organized. The audio is a little tinny at times. B-roll is fantastic. The voice over is concise but well written and engaging. Very well done!

Judge 1

Positives: - Your writing is clear and concise. - Your story has a solid beginning, middle, and end.

Improvements: -The opening shots were confusing for me. It wasn't clear what the students were doing. If you're going to use that video, you should write to it to describe what we're seeing. For example, why the student is blindfolded. - It would be nice to hear some of the actual class or interviews that students had with professionals.

Judge 2

Positives: After the first :17 seconds, this was a good segment. Interesting and relevant story. Interviews were good.

Improvements: I have to say that the first few scenes were confusing and seemed to have nothing to do with the rest of the piece. The scenes with the guy in the hallway and girl laughing and the students huddled in a crowd and leading a student while blindfolded were distracting and not connected visually or narratively to the main story. They took away from on an otherwise good story. If you only have 2 minutes to tell a story, you have to be clear in your message, including your visuals.

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