My March - ID# 279

Homewood-Flossmoor

Natural Audio News Package

Entry Description

A day at the Woman's March.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/15 3:05 pm - Footage kind of generic. Composition weak. Some good. Nice graphics. Good interviews. Didn't really make a point or tell a story.
• 3/7 10:40 am - Great b-roll, nice videography from the day. I felt your story was unfocused. The male interview near the beginning talked about the cause and what it meant and your later interviews talked about what inspired them to march. There was no transition between these topics.
• 3/1 3:43 pm - Great shots to start the story. The first person talking sounded like it was a speech. I wish that you showed that person. Watch the framing on your B-roll because you do not frame some of them in a way that lets the viewer see what is happening. Put the viewer in the spot, force them to see what you are seeing through the lens or what you see when shooting. I like the interviews, but I wish that they were out in the streets during the march, or that you had B-roll of those people.

Judge 1

Positives: This was a good topic for a nats/pkg. There were plenty of opportunities for nats full and sots. I like that you incorporated nats of the march throughout the piece, even behind the interviews. You did a good job showcasing the march so it didn't look like the same shot over and over.

Improvements: I'm confused on the intention of your piece. Was this about the Women's Day March or protests in general? I think you could have done more to explain what the Women's Day March was about while incorporating why people are marching. I also don't understand why your first sot was with a man while showing all video of the Women's Day march. Why didn't you interview people at the march? Were your interviewees at the march? There was a disconnect between the interviews and the event. You labeled your name banners with a pink hat yet no where did you explain what that meant or what it symbolized. Don't assume your viewer knows that was for the Women's Day March. Watch your head room on interviews. Your interview shots were very tight and cut off people's heads.

Judge 2

Positives: Interesting idea to include the perspective of the young man…but would not have had him be the first on camera bite.

Improvements: The structure was disjointed. Did the students actually march? If so, we should see broll or photos of them from the march. The footage looked as if it was taken from a news source. It did not feel connected to the students. Since this was a piece about a women's march, I'm not sure it works to have the image of the young man as the first image that we see after hearing voiceover from a young woman that we do not see. The interviews could have looked much better if the students had not been put in front of a white background.

Judge 3

Positives: Interesting backdrop for your interviews. Good variety of shots and angles of the march. I did not feel it was repetitive.

Improvements: More nat sound would have made this piece better. There was no clear narrative on who these people were. It felt like a collection of sights and sounds. Also, a piece on the women's march needs to have its first interview on camera be a woman.

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