Pursuer - ID# 284

Eisenhower

Movie Trailer

Entry Description

The sense of eeriness and the sense of an unwanted negative entity following you. The main impact of the story line is that you are being haunted and followed by your past.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/30 10:17 am - You had great music and sound effect choices--song at the end is effective as well as the clock ticks--ending "Pursuer" graphic is very cool with the blood drip--the plot of the film isn't clear. We know someone is following him, but why? Would like more of a hint as to where the story will take us--Actor could be more committed. Actor does not seem very afraid, he just seems bothered.
• 3/5 10:34 pm - The dips to black were effective to create the tone you were looking for here. Music was good, and the ending moments created suspense. I'm not sure what this story is about, and movie trailers need to convey a more specific story purpose to hook the audience into wanting to see more. I have a good sense of mood and tone from this but little else. I don't know enough about my protagonist and your ending moment would be very confusing without your entry description. An actual audience wouldn't read that description beforehand, so you need to make the story clearer. Some good elements are here, but this needed further development.

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