If Only We Listened - ID# 307

Barrington

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

A dramatic narrative about pollution.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/28 10:25 am - Your beautiful cinematography made the visual track of this piece quite memorable. I am struck by the number of engaging shots in this short piece. Sound design is appropriate, but I am wondering if ambient sound might have reinforced some ideas put forth in your narration. The piece is nicely edited, and the pacing of the shots changes in response to ideas expressed in the narration. This may have not been the most appropriate category for this piece. While the narration does express conflict, the piece does not follow the standard conventions of a narrative. For example, the narrative does not allow the viewer to follow the "protagonist" develop as he interacts with the obstacles placed before him.
• 3/7 9:06 am - Drone shots were artistic.
• 3/5 11:11 am - Some beautiful shots and effects. Meaningful script.

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