GSA News Package - ID# 346

Maine South

News Package

Entry Description

A story highlighting the Gay-Straight Alliance at Maine South High School.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/5 2:08 pm - Good story. Nice that you properly had the lavs on the interviewees. Why the graphic at the beginning? Your story should tell us what it is about. Interview audio mainly in left channel. Composition of interviews could be better. Zoom in, headroom, noseroom. Text hard to read. Should have an outline. Is the story about the club or the window painting? Should have had some other b-roll. Story just ended. It seems like there should have been a little more.
• 2/27 11:42 am - This was a solid story and topic. I wish you would've had a little more video that was related to what you were talking about. The video you used was never explained as to why they were painting a window. I believe your soundbites were strong. I know you took a little risk with the framing of your second interview. I think that side view of her face didn't really work (as I didn't really see the point).

Judge 1

Positives: Good storytelling of why this club exists and what the club is all about. Good interviews - the sound bytes you chose really helped to tell the story. Nice b-roll of the window decorating - what other b-roll shots could you have used?

Improvements: Watch the framing of your interviews. One gal was looking towards the left and you had her positioned on the left side of the shot - the lead room should be in the direction where she's looking - not behind her. Balance your audio - all of it should be coming through on 2 channels (L&R). Always include the natural audio from your b-roll in your story - otherwise it's awkward to watch without it. Tighten up on some of your interview shots - especially of the teacher. There was too much "empty" space around her that wasn't necessary for the story. If this is a true news package, there needs to be some type of ending/conclusion to it from the reporter. The 2nd VO (or maybe it was a sound byte) was from someone that was unknown - identify who that was. If it was a VO, then it should have been in the same voice as the original reporter who first started this story.

Judge 2

Positives: i loved that you told the story mostly with interviews. nice job getting those and concentrating on letting them tell their story. good job on lighting!

Improvements: on some of the broll if you had repositioned yourself to get a better angle on some of the shots of the volunteers would have liked to see a little more variety for broll shot.

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