Clarity - ID# 391
Neuqua Valley
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
Cambrie, a teenage girl, attempts to maintain her "normal" life while her mother is on a trip away from home. Cambrie relies on her older sister, Anna, but soon realizes that Anna is becoming increasingly distant. As she gains clarity, Cambrie recognizes the importance of love and support throughout struggles of all kinds.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/28 3:18 pm - Your narrative establishes a clear and relevant conflict and develops the two principal characters and their relationship. Your shots are varied in their composition and tend to be nicely exposed. In addition, you demonstrate the ability to cut on action. When shooting future pieces, pay careful attention to your composition/camerawork. A few shots have a little too much headroom and some contain unnecessary camera movements. Finally, the focus on a few shots appears a tad soft. The dialogue is easy to follow, but the ambient noise within the same scene shifted abruptly at times. One example of this occurs in the kitchen scene just before Anna leaves. You are working with a serious, complex and painful issue. While the happy ending may be comforting, is it too simplistic? Given the severity of Anna's illness, does the resolution to this conflict come too easily? Could be she be "cured" this easily?
- 3/7 9:07 am - Back story of writing paper helps setup characters.
- 3/5 8:25 pm - Good audio. Good use of music. Well-framed shots. I like that you are taking the topic so seriously, and dealing with it in a sensitive way. Not sure why the video ends with a shot of the “Academics” sign—seems like a lost opportunity for a more meaningful image. Maybe the end is too simple—it’s not that easy to overcome.
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