Lost Season? - ID# 416

Highland Park

News Package

Entry Description

This "HP Minute . . . or Two" features a varsity basketball player who must sit out her senior season with an injury.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/7 1:48 pm - Your B-Roll is excellent, particularly in regards to the B-Roll with the natural sound at the beginning (the floor-level group shot at 0:06 is my favorite shot!). A filming tip for future is to find the part of your subject you MOST want your viewer to see and ensure that portion is framed and lit appropriately (most often, this is the face). From 00:47-00:53, your B-Roll could be framed to be more creative and intimate, finding the angle that will highlight her and her rebuilding. Regarding the interviews, I would love to see more focused interviews regarding the subject. The framing was awkward with both the subject and the back of the interviewer. Finally, it's nice to see the anchor's face, but not necessary, as your V/O provides continuity for the story. However, the male V/O at the end was confusing and could easily be remedied for clarity and continuity. Keep up the great work going forward! You have a nice grip on creating a story finding the shots that tell the story. Now move outside your comfort zone and find those shots that will tell the emotion of the story. Great work!
• 3/5 12:07 pm - Why do you have 2 reporters? Kind of confusing for the viewer. Interviews should be closer up. We see more of the reporter than the interviewee. Also, the camera should be level with the person being interviewed. In one the camera is very low. A lot of the b-roll seems to repeat. Lav. wire is sloppy. If you don't want to run it under their shirt, run it behind the person. Some nice shots.
• 2/27 11:24 am - Interviews ideally shouldn't have the back of interviewers in the shot. Be careful with your lav mic position as it looked messy on the shirt. It's sometimes tough to have two people voice a news package. Lots of your narration was you telling us what someone else says. It is okay to do this a small amount, but a few tracks in a row said what someone said.

Judge 1

Positives: really nice broll. Love that you did different angles Nice personal interviews with the athlete

Improvements: your vo is nice, but try to let interviews drive your story. Your most compelling moments come from those interviews versus scripted vo. little confused why the vo voice switched mid story- distracting from the content of the story

Judge 2

Positives: Great b-roll of student practicing strengthening exercises after her injury. Really adds to the story. Good story that a lot of kids will be able to relate to.

Improvements: Sloppy mic cords are very distracting and unnecessary. Always take the time to properly and cleanly mic someone. Try running the cord under clothing so only the mic is showing or run the cord around the neckline to the back. At 1:12, we're hearing a voice of someone we haven't met. As a matter of fact, we haven't met the first reporter! it would have been nicer to have one person/ voice identified as the storyteller. Or if there are two, identify the second person maybe through Chiron.

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