Lines of Fun - ID# 42

Glenbrook North

Commercial

Entry Description

This is a commercial produced as part of our commercial parody unit. We decided to spoof an amusement park commercial and some of the reasons you wouldn't want to go.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/5 11:55 pm - A little difficult to understand what was being said in the beginning. The gray curtain background was a bit boring. The idea was funny but didn't quite land. It was more of a comedy sketch about a made up product than an actual commercial. Commercials sell a product, there was not a product.
• 2/27 1:33 pm - idea is funny but you need to transition into comedy in a quicker fashion... pacing good overall did not evoke the humor that was sought

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